Besides being cruel, is it relay necessary in caging animals. It would be much more pleasurable to see the animal in its natural habitat, opposed to a small cramped cage. Some animals have died just from the conditions that their cages have been kept in. imagine you resting in your own filth, if we wouldn’t like it then why should we keep animals in cages?
If animals are kept in cages they are not taught how to fend for themselves if they are released into the wild. There for how can an animal such as a lion be recognised as a hunter if it does not have the necessary skills in order to fend for them self’s in the wild, therefore they will eventually die from starvation, dehydration, or being attacked by another animal.
If an animal for example is caught and caged, brought into a warm climate, the polar bear will proberbally not be able to adapt to the warmer climate therefor it could possibly die from the rapid change of climate, therefor making a rare species of animal, even rarer to see in the wild, therefor taking the species one step closer to extinction.
In conclusion I am against caging animals as it is cruel and takes away their rights. Some animals die just from the conditions of their cage, while other animals that have been caged may not have been taught how to fend for themselves in the wild, and if they are released they could die from not being taught these critical skills.
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Audience
The writer’s capacity to orient, engage and persuade the reader = 3
Text structure
The organisation of the structural components of a persuasive text (introduction, body and conclusion) into an appropriate and effective text structure =5
Ideas
The selection, relevance and elaboration of ideas for a persuasive argument =4
Persuasive devices
The use of a range of persuasive devices to enhance the writer’s position and persuade the reader =3
Vocabulary
The range and precision of contextually appropriate language choices =4
Cohesion
The control of multiple threads and relationships across the text, achieved through the use of grammatical elements (referring words, text connectives, conjunctions) and lexical elements (substitutions, repetitions, word associations) =4
Paragraphing
The segmenting of text into paragraphs that assists the reader to follow the line of argument =5
Sentence structure
The production of grammatically correct, structurally sound and meaningful sentences =5
Punctuation
The use of correct and appropriate punctuation to aid the reading of the text =5
Spelling
The accuracy of spelling and the difficulty of the words used =3
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I think you did a really good job on your writing task. The only problem was that your punctuation and spelling was not very good as you made a few errors and I wasn't very persuaded with your point of view as you need more language techniques. Nice job overall though!
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